The Original Story 11-15: Annotized

Chapter Eleven:

*I2: That would be Mephisto in disguise.

*I14: See, Kyle isn't the one who is readily dismissed.

*II2: Chuck seldom acknowledges the accomplishments of his friends but with a combination of being saved and healed by pulling a fast one on the God of Lies is enough to earn Joe a small compliment.

*III6: This phrase originated in the 1600's as an abbreviated form of "God's blood" (as well as "Od's bones", "Od's wounds", and more). It'd be less dramatic if Loki had appeared and said "WTF, mate?"

*III12: The sixth ring of Hell is reserved for heretics who are trapped in flaming tombs and use the encroaching steam to make a mean cappuccino.

*IV1: SCIENCE TIME! Sound frequency is measured by the quantity of sound waves occurring over time. Higher frequency, such as Humbug's glove, emit waves tightly packed. By slowing time around her, Rina essentially decreases the frequency to her perception resulting in a much less annoying and disabling level.

*V1: The Uni-Power is an extra-dimensional force that possesses people (normal and super-powered) during a time of crisis and transforms them into Captain Universe. While exposed, they possess a myriad of powers which include superhuman strength, flight, Uni-Vision (microscopic vision,vision, and telescopic vision), telekinesis, enhanced senses, a psychic awareness of imminent danger, molecular rearrangement of organic and inorganic matter, transmutation of elements, the ability to fire bursts of energy and concussive force, and hypnosis.
*V1: While the guys *technically* count Kyle's open wish from Loki, his possession by the Uni-Power will be Kyle's first official point of omnipotence.

*VI3: It can never be reiterated enough that Joe doesn't particularly care for small children - especially those that beat the crap out of him.

*VII2: Chuck's use of Kyle's line is the first time it is used in a manner other than a cry of terror.

*VII3: Oldest trick in the book.

*VII4: "Ba-ha!" is actually the catchphrase of the IRL Kyle Reeser.

*VII7: First use of "Oh damn" by a villain. At this point, I think enough notes have been made around this phrase that you can take whatever notes about it you want in the future and leave me out of it.

*VIII1: While a good psychology paper could be written surrounding the idea of Joe having to pick out his own psychological flaws, it's worth noting that the final line stems from a point IRL where Joe and Chuck were watching Single White Female. At one point, Bridget Fonda's character comes home and checks her answering machine which notes "You have *no* new messages," at which point Chuck added "*No*one loves you." Also, watching Single White Female together does not make Joe and Chuck a couple.

*X2: This is just a fun image to picture (Galactus spraying juice out of his nose, not Kyle getting shot across several galaxies....although that's pretty fun too)

*X5: While this line is fairly insignificant by itself, TNS would inadvertently give Kyle a quirk about verbal redundancies.

*XI3: What Kyle is yet unaware of the fact that an infinitely minute trace of the omnipotence that is the Uni-Power will remain in his system.

*XI4: Women are often attracted to power, and as Kyle was, seconds before, arguably the most powerful man on the planet, you can't fault Rina for falling for him.

Villains defeated by Chuck: 4 (this Chapter - Scavenger)
Villains defeated by Kyle: 6 (this Chapter - Galactus, Memphisto)
Villains defeated by Joe: 13 (this Chapter - No Powers Boy, Mr. Negativity)

Chapter Twelve:

*Title: Here, a duel reference to the training Joe and Chuck will do around his Negative Zone hands as well as Kyle's first ever attempts at a date.

*I4: 'All these things are true' used to be a favorite IRL response to several obvious statements.

*I11: It's a testament to Chuck's adaptation to the MU that he has more interest in shopping bags that the acquisition of a flying vehicle.

*I15: Kyle and his DC-fandom take the 'Batman' route of naming things.

*I18: The only ever times the vehicle is referenced again in TOS is in TOS15 and TOS18 where Rina and Joe respectively call it the Supercoolmobile.

*I20: As comic book code dictates, hot female heroes and villains have to be scantily clad. This outfit is even more revealing that her old Timeslip uniform.

*I21/22: 'Ungh' or 'Ugnh' in TOS depicts sexual arousal. Remember this for later, kids.

*I29: This jokes stems from a MRPG in which after inquiring about why Unstable Molecule Fabric had to be cut with a laser and being informed that it couldn't be cut by normal scissors, Charles Bailey made the excellent observation: "So, what, now we're invulnerable to scissors?"

*I34: And it's a good thing too, the extra outfits will come into use in TOS24.

*II5: Considering the trio got the Pogo Plane on the second day of being in the MU, that means Reed Richards never inquired about getting it back for the intermittent five days. Of course, between staving off threats and being bogged down in his scientific work, you can forgive him for not being concerned about the status of a million dollar piece of equipment he had handed off to three guys he'd known for less than a day who had no ties or obligations to anything in the world.

*III1: The Cosmic Cube is a man-made device which is capable of making any wish the wielder has come true. However, being man-made also makes it somewhat easy to destroy, as it has been on a number of occasions before being rebuilt again later.
*III1: At the time TOS was written, the Red Skull was destroyed in battle with Captain America, and his essence was trapped inside the remains of a Cosmic Cube, which R.S. (the only "real" mind in the place) subconsciously molded into a recreation of Nazi Germany.

*IV1: Located on the 65th floor within Rockefeller Center, the Rainbow Room is one of the most upscale places one can go to. Kyle and Rina's date probably took up a large chunk of what was leftover of the Fantasticash.

*V8: When launching an attack on a friend under the notion of training, it's a good idea to make sure they are somewhat aware of what is going on so they don't get hurt.

*V11: Dammit, what did we just say? However, this does put into perspective Joe's lack of aim - something which will be corrected in TOS37.

*VI3: Joe refers to Rina in TOS and TNS several times as a 'slut'. Kyle...well, despite all inferences, he's still a man.

*VII3: The end result of the Red Skull's creation would look very similar to a Rubik's Cube with the white face being replaced by black.

*IX5: With his eyes closed at the time, Chuck would not have realized that he actually extended the Negative Zone energies from his hands to surround the cables that ensnared him to destroy them.

*IX6: As of current writings (up to TNS63), Mr. Negativity has still yet to fully develop that ability, but his future self that shows up in TNS46 does.

*X3: While Joe is often able to use his unearthly Marvel knowledge to save the day, Kyle's incredible bizarreness gets him by in many a scenario.

*XI4: These mini-explosions are the precursors to larger pseudopods of energy that will later be dubbed Nega-Blasts, the signature attack of Mr. Negativity.

Villains defeated by Chuck: 4
Villains defeated by Kyle: 7 (this Chapter - thugs)
Villains defeated by Joe: 13

Chapter Thirteen:
Title: Mathematically, anything multiplied by itself is squared. Multiplied a third time, it's cubed.

*I5: Captain America is generally seen as the most loved and respected hero. However, the guys, at best, treat him as well as a door-to-door salesman.

*I8: After the Fantastic Four and Avengers were thought destroyed by the villainous Onslaught, the Masters of Evil took on the guise of a new superheroic team - the Thunderbolts. The ultimate goal was to gain the trust of the public and government so they could gain access to Avengers and S.H.I.E.L.D. files which could then be sold to other villains.

*I9: While Reed Richards is accustomed to all kinds of extra-dimensional beings and occurrences, there is still no knowing what the results would be upon discovery that their identities did not exist.

*I19: It's a testament to Joe's ability to be a total dick that he can get that kind of reaction from Captain America. It's equivalent to having Santa Claus run up and kick you in the balls.

*II1: It's important to note that it's a German accent as the wording could be easily mistaken for Russian or Transylvanian.

*II2: It's still better than "Not in the face!" or "Leeeeerooooyyyyy Jeeennnnnkinnnnsssss!"

*II6: The exclamation point really does the job in expressing the surprise at Kyle's accomplishment of catching an object.
*II6: Kyle is adept at solving Rubik's cubes. This skill earns him control over the Cosmic Cube and gives him his next bout of omnipotence.

*III2: The Avengers do, in fact, put the Supercools right in TOS37. Admittedly, it takes twenty-one of them to do it, and they didn't even cross the line.

Villains defeated by Chuck: 4
Villains defeated by Kyle: 8 (this Chapter - Red Skull)
Villains defeated by Joe: 13

Chapter Fourteen:
*Title: This is a reference to the dance/song in which the participant has to lean backward and go underneath a horizontal bar with the bar being lowered each round.

*I12: The Magenta Knight and Occam's Razor will both appear again in TOS30.

*II1: This should actually be Nuevo Sol, but in Joe's defense it's in the 2099 series, and very few people gave a shit about that line of books.

*II2: This is also Joe's normal tone.
*II2: Technically, Occam's Razor states that given multiple theories, the simplest one is the most preferred given all things taken into account.

*III1: The two fight in TOS30 shortly after Chuck first wears the NegaBands which greatly enhance his powers. Despite the fact that this occurs chronologically later for Chuck, time has no meaning in Limbo, so it's still all good.

*III5: Chuck's trajectory will take him past Kyle and his group in TNS50.

*IV1: Changing the wording in the bubbles of a particular comic book, Joe IRL replaced Psylocke's battle cry, using her psionic knife, in a scene to "Eat hot psionic death!" This led to a sequence of jokes that included the punchline of "Eat hot (insert noun/adjective) death!"

*V1: The gentleman thanking Chuck here IRL ended up being referred to as "The Man in Limbo" and would be the longest running mystery of TOS. The best anecdote relates to Joe, Chuck, and Kyle playing a game of Supercoolopoly. Both Chuck and Joe were making offers to get a particular property of Kyle's which culminated in Joe offering to reveal to Kyle who "The Man in Limbo" was which put Chuck into coniptions.

*V2: SPOILER! It will be revealed in TOS50 that the person Chuck meets is Mold aka Terraform - the character Chuck played in MRPG. As he's a creation of Chuck's mind, he would naturally be the only one able to recognize him.

*VI: While it seems redundant, this is the same scene as in TOS8 but from Rina's perspective.

*VIII2: The little red ball Kang has is a Chronal Equipment Storage Unit aka CESU which he uses to summon forth his arsenal of weapons from a pocket dimension. As Joe will note later, it's pretty sweet.

*IX1: This is the first of several timejumps back and each time Joe will have his arm broken in a different matter.

*IX3: Each jump also results in a different person or persons being killed.

*X1: Gamorra appears here from TOS8 as explained in the follow-up sentences.

*XI & XII: While this appears to come from nowhere, this is the after affect of XVI. Remember, it's Limbo so time doesn't matter much.

*XIII1: Rina can explain it away as much as she wants, but that doesn't help that this is overall a really confusing and fucked up chapter.

*XVI3: Chuck is the math guy. Joe is the English guy. They're both really nice guys but also enjoy being dicks to each other.

*XVI9: Keanu Reeve's character in "Bill and Ted's Excellent Adventure" gets out of tricky situations by giving himself mental reminders for the future to get things to help get them out of the situation, take them back in time, and set it up for himself in the past.

*XIX1: This is a reference to South Park's Kyle & Stan's lines of "Oh my God, they killed Kenny!" "You bastards!".

*XX1: Technically, the Guardians of Time (actually called the Timekeepers) only jump in to alter chronal events to ensure their own survival, but even the most tolerant and patient parent will eventually snap when their kids keeping fucking stuff up.
*XX1: The memory wipe will also eliminate Mr. Negativity's knowledge of who The Man in Limbo is. However, as Carl Jung would note, the unconscious will house that information deep within.

Chapter Fourteen (again): The movie Clue was filmed with three different endings for the theaters to show randomly. Upon release for purchase, all three endings were played back to back with the time being reset to a splitting off point for the varient possibilities.

Villains defeated by Chuck: 5 (this Chapter - Occam's Razor)
Villains defeated by Kyle: 8
Villains defeated by Joe: 13

Chapter Fifteen:

*I1: Two things Chuck's father knew about Joe IRL: 1) he's gay and 2) he loves Dr. Pepper.

*I6: Joe is insistent throughout TOS that the trio find jobs. The closest anyone gets, though, is a job offer from Emma Frost in TOS43.

*I7: Joe is an English major and an excellent writer; however, it will eventually become evident that he has trouble describing Timeslip's speed bursts beyond "lightning speed" in TOS.

*I17: From this point until Joe smashes his CESU in TNS5, it becomes the standard method from which Joe turns into The Scavenger. It definitely beats out changing in a telephone booth or dropping your pants at a luxurious restaurant.

*II3: For those who like to note that money can't buy happiness, it's at least shown here that money can lighten the mental burden of being trapped in another dimension.

*III3: As far as can be determined, Kyle Reeser IRL has never swooned. However, Kyle Reeser IRL has never had anyone as hot and scantily dressed as Rina Patel show romantic interest in him. But really, who has?

*IV3-5: There's a myriad of lines throughout TOS that were so enjoyable that they were frequently repeated IRL. However, the back and forth exchange was probably the most frequently used due to the common occurrence of noting that something was cool.

*V3: The alien shapeshifting Skrulls have secretly switched the normal judge and bailiffs here with members of their own race - let's see if anyone notices.

*VI3: This is the point where Joe acquires the Sunsword. For those of you keeping track at home, that makes 3 items he has scavenged from defeated foes and 3 items given/loaned to him by other heroes.

*VII1: During the short period that Chuck and Kyle are apart from each other, Kyle is replaced by a Skrull - Elyk, who will later be revealed as a human shapeshifter - Doppleganger, who will later be revealed (in TSQ) to actually be a human-Skrull hybrid who gets great gas mileage. The REAL Kyle, which will be explained further in TOS21 was taken for testing due to his repeated encounters with omnipotence.

*IX4: Being an alien (or a hybrid who has been brainwashed to think he's an alien), Elyk has no romantic interest in a human. Apparently, Skrulls aren't as open-minded in the romance department as Captain Kirk.

*XII4: Annotator's Note: I had never heard of that expression before, and in all honesty, have yet to hear it outside of The Story.

*XIII11: At this point, Rina's hugged Chuck, kissed Kyle, and gotten in bed with Joe....is there any wonder Joe calls her a slut?

*XIV2: For casting of the Supercools movie, Macauly Culkin was cast for the role of Dungeonmaster.

*XV5: No matter how much you dislike someone or hate their species, the idea of an unbridled spending spree can bring people together.

*XVI5: As far as can be told, the Dungeonmaster has yet to make any further appearances.

Villains defeated by Chuck: 5
Villains defeated by Kyle: 8
Villains defeated by Joe: 14 (this Chapter - Dungeonmaster)